To only be a few days late in getting the chance to meet the whiskey priest has caused me great frustration. After temporarily losing his trail, I had decided to go back to the Fellows and see if they or anyone around them could provide me with enough information to point me in the correct direction of the whiskey priest. I was met with any empty plantation and a nearly empty village close by. The only one left was a woman who was about to leave until she saw me approaching.
As the only person left I could get information from, the woman sadly told me about what had happened. The gringo, which I had been unaware of while searching for the priest, had come to the village and murdered her baby. While trying to get to the body of her dead child, a man came to the village and went into the hut her child was in. The man turned out to be the whiskey priest. He accompanied her to the cemetery where the woman laid her child to rest. At some point while she was praying the priest had departed, off to whatever destination he had in mind. Feeling guilty about not being able to tell me where he was headed, the woman suggested that I head north, to where many priests had tried to escape to since it meant leaving the country that persecuted them.
I like how you wrote your entry like you are actually following the priest and you don't always know where he is. The perspective you chose to use is one that I wouldn't have though of!
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DeleteThis is really good hailey! You do sound like a enthusiastic journalist pursuing a good story. I like how you're good at keeping your stories connective and intriguing.... I really enjoy reading your posts. Twos things I might suggest: 1) maybe make them a little longer so we have more to read at once. Also, try to perhaps add more certain scenes, aka specific things that happen, such as the priest meeting his daughter for the first time in a long time (I threw out that idea because a lot of people wrote about it). But other than that it's a really good story you've got here.
DeleteThis is really well done Hailey! I'm really impressed how you manage to depict yourself as a journalist really into the story, and really involved in the storyline. Your imagery is also really great here! :) Only thing I would say- you perhaps need some more details. Thats basically all! Excellent job! Really well done! I must say.. I'm going to miss reading your blogs every week! :)
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